Moiradestruction application

[moiradestruction]

OOC Information (Fill in as you wish)
Name: Moira Destruction
Age: 17
Contact: [e-mail]
Role Playing Experience: none as of yet but I have written a few fanfictions.

IC Information
Role Play Sample: Draco Malfoy,
::Bloody twat who does he think he is struting around school like he's god. Damn Potter. Damn the Weaslette and his girlfriend too. I cannot believe HE LIVED AGAIN! The Basilisk should have killed him, but no the mighty Potter must prevail once again. He had to crack the case, I swear he must be that Holmes guy from muggle studies, no doubt a worthless mudblood anyway.::

"Mr. Malfoy please pay attention." said Mcgonnagel

'sneer'

"Mr. Malfoy!" Mcgonnagle said again with a little more impatience.

"Yes professor." I said

:: Stupid Mcgonnagle, lets Potter get away with everything. I can't wait until this bloody class is over with. I should round up Crabb and Goyle and go make Granger cry a little. That'll show Potter. Hope he regrets ever living.::

The Genres: harry potter,


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[Ru'Thor]

Okay... a few things...

"Yes professor." I said

Roleplays are done in the third person. It would have been, ["Yes, professor," he said.]

Also, actions are written out, not with asterisks or apostrophes. "Draco sneered" would have been better.

Thoughts are shown in italics. Use the I button in the "Add Tags" section, or just use the code...

[i]TEXT[/i]

One last thing that I caught: watch your punctuation. There are several places in that post that need commas or periods.

That's all I've got... Lali?

[Lali]

A few more things.

Spelling, for one. *wince* I'm a spelling freak, I confess. I'll let most things go by without shrieking and stabbing people, but beware of character names! McGonagall and Crabbe, for example!

This is a messageboard-based site, so there's no hurry to reply within the space of a few minutes - as anyone who's in any RP with me will tell you, replies can take days to get up. (Weeks... *blush*) So you've got time to save the text somewhere and come back to it if you don't think you'll finish while you're still online. You also have time to copy and paste it into Word or some other place which has a spellcheck, which would remove such errors as "struting" - which should be "strutting".

Feel free to have a look around at the RPs already on here - you should find plenty of examples of correct grammar, spelling and punctuation. One hopes. ^_^

If you'd like to edit your sample to let us know you've taken all that on board, we'll have another look.


Squeak. *blush* I feel quite mean now. *hugs* Welcome, anyway.